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Published: January 3, 2015
Publisher: Self
Author: Website
Info: Goodreads

A deadly infection threatens to wipe out humanity. The only people who can stem its advance are the Silver, a vampiric race who offer a simple exchange: protection in return for blood and subservience. It’s not a deal that Emmy’s willing to make, but as her world burns around her she finds herself in the arms of the enemy and the line between oppressor and saviour begins to blur.

After an attack by the infected, Emmy is rescued by the handsome Drew who introduces her to the world of the Silver. Desperate to escape subjugation and confused by her attraction to him, she gathers what remains of her surrogate family and plans to make a break for freedom.

But despite her efforts to resist, she is drawn further into the intrigues of the mysterious Silver through the agency of their ruler, the Primus: Solomon. Emmy refuses to submit to the cold and detached Primus and an attempt on her life makes it clear that he is unable to protect her from the political machinations of his race.

As the connection between them deepens she must choose between her desire and her will to rebel, but can she trust his intentions when everyone is after her blood? (goodreads.com)

There is a lot of amateur hour going on in A BARGAIN IN SILVER to the point where it was really difficult for me to get through. The pacing was incredibly slow, there wasn’t a whole lot going on to advance the plot, and the author spent way too much time giving inane detail to the point where she didn’t leave anything to the imagination. I don’t need a detailed breakdown of what the left hand and the right hand and the left leg and the right leg are doing, nor do I need to know where exactly in a room a character is and how many feet each thing is from the character. Just gobs of detail unnecessarily padding the book.

I think the vampire apocalypse concept is interesting; that’s why I agreed to review the book initially. But it ultimately ends up being bookends to an insufferably slow plot steeped in constipated looks from Drew and neutered vampires that simply orbit around Emmy in an offputtingly Mary Sue sort of way.

It’s all very Twilight and the ending doesn’t help there. The silver concept is neat in the same way I thought glittering vampires were originally neat in Twilight. It’s something different and it sets Jaffrey’s vampires apart from others. But that’s about it. The majority of the story is spent watching two powerful vampires cock fight over Emmy. Meanwhile Emmy’s tripping and falling over everything and constantly bleeding around them.

The prologue doesn’t do the book any favors either. It opens the book with Emmy wearing a vampire collar and serving drinks in a vampire bar. Then the story starts on the night the world went to hell, successfully killing the tension of about 2/3 of the book. I know where she ends up and how she ends up. Why am I reading this?

For most of the book there’s no antagonizing force propelling the story forward. It’s mostly a day in the life of Emmy and that’s about it. She tries to be an active participant in her own story but she’s really just shoved along as the pages turn. Nothing really antagonizing happens to her that would be cause of true dramatic tension until about 3/4 of the way through the book, and it’s barely anything. It’s more insinuated. And then when it finally does come to a head it’s all of a sudden there, as if coming out of nowhere. I guess it’s vaguely hinted at throughout the book because an incident involving Drew makes absolutely no sense when compared against his personality but it just comes off as bad writing. And I guess it ultimately is bad writing because the author doesn’t do a good job of threading the tension throughout the plot. Too much time is spent on Sol and Drew slap-fighting over Emmy. But you finally get a full chapter of villain monologuing in the penultimate chapter that explains absolutely everything. It’s just clunky.

This is a draft that needs some serious rewriting and tightening. The voice is bland at best with all the Ben Stein details going on and I should not be bored in a vampire apocalypse novel and I was most of the time. The plot is slow-moving and clunky when it does move and character development leaves a lot to be desired. I’m not sure if the author’s intent was to go for a Twilight knockoff but that’s pretty much what this is, with a sterile-detailed sex scene.

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I received a copy of this book from the author in exchange for an honest review.

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